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Walid Newbie


Joined: Apr 15, 2009 Posts: 15 Location: UAE Dubai
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Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 9:23 am Post subject: Seeking ITIL process manager position in Dubai - UAE |
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Dear,
An IT professional with a litany of certifications and an impressive track record of efficiently delivering projects, possessing proficiency in implementing change configuration release management control model, process re-engineering and delivering sophisticated technology solutions, seeking a techno-managerial position in a dynamic organization to apply accrued expertise in charting a mutually beneficial growth path
from more details download my cv from [Removed By Admin: No Links Please]
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UKVIKING Senior Itiler

Joined: Sep 16, 2006 Posts: 3591 Location: London, UK
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Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 6:11 pm Post subject: |
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Walid
Try less babble speak .
Try simple 1 syllable words _________________ John Hardesty
ITSM Manager's Certificate (Red Badge)
Change Management is POWER & CONTROL. /....evil laughter |
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Timo Senior Itiler

Joined: Oct 26, 2007 Posts: 295 Location: Calgary, Canada
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Posted: Wed Dec 30, 2009 3:15 am Post subject: |
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No kidding. When I get resumes like this they go straight to the shredder pile. |
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Walid Newbie


Joined: Apr 15, 2009 Posts: 15 Location: UAE Dubai
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Posted: Wed Dec 30, 2009 9:48 am Post subject: CV is on my website. |
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Dear Timo and UKviking,
thanks for your post, i spend 200$ on a CV service to compose such an essay, anyways, companies who are looking for CCR manager will call me if interested, those who are not won't.
By the way are you in Dubai? |
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UKVIKING Senior Itiler

Joined: Sep 16, 2006 Posts: 3591 Location: London, UK
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Posted: Wed Dec 30, 2009 4:52 pm Post subject: |
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Well I am in London, UK
Timo is in Calgary, Canada
You wasted 200$ _________________ John Hardesty
ITSM Manager's Certificate (Red Badge)
Change Management is POWER & CONTROL. /....evil laughter |
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thechosenone69 Senior Itiler

Joined: Jun 06, 2007 Posts: 268
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Posted: Wed Dec 30, 2009 7:19 pm Post subject: |
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You sure did I should start writing CV's for living. Walid srop me an e-mail with your CV I might know some clients in Dubai who might be interested (in writing you another CV) jk
E-mail: a.makahleh@gmail.com _________________ Ali Makahleh
Configuration Management(Blue Badge),
ITILV2 Service Manager(Red Badge),
ITILV3 Expert(Lilac Badge) Certified.
“If you can't describe what you are doing as a process, you don't know what you're doing." W. Edwards Deming. |
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Timo Senior Itiler

Joined: Oct 26, 2007 Posts: 295 Location: Calgary, Canada
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Posted: Thu Dec 31, 2009 2:30 am Post subject: |
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In all seriousness Walid, just give your resume a try on our own. I understand you wanting to present yourself in the best light possible, but using big phony words just doesn't do it anymore. The best resume is the one written in a plane language, short sentences and to the point. It is the one that cites specific achievements and examples of your work. To the employer it would look like you are an honest person, who knows A, B and C and achieved X, Y, Z. I bet if I read your resume as it is now I wouldn't really get a feel for what you are capable of. |
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UKVIKING Senior Itiler

Joined: Sep 16, 2006 Posts: 3591 Location: London, UK
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Posted: Thu Dec 31, 2009 2:47 am Post subject: |
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Walid
Timo is correct
If you are doing change management
A strong statement like
Provided mangement structure and control through the Netowrk Change advisory board
developed or improved standards for submitted requested
worked with implementation teams to development improve standard plans for testing and implementations
worked to reduce the # of emergency changes per month from X% to Y% by conducting post imp reviews on emergency changes
Enforce or improve enforce ment of E CM policy
blah blah blah _________________ John Hardesty
ITSM Manager's Certificate (Red Badge)
Change Management is POWER & CONTROL. /....evil laughter |
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UKVIKING Senior Itiler

Joined: Sep 16, 2006 Posts: 3591 Location: London, UK
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Posted: Thu Dec 31, 2009 2:49 am Post subject: |
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And of course my favoriyte
made all project manager rue the day when they came unprepared for approving their projects into production
ensured that my name alone will strike fear in those who desire changes to be done with out testing _________________ John Hardesty
ITSM Manager's Certificate (Red Badge)
Change Management is POWER & CONTROL. /....evil laughter |
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Walid Newbie


Joined: Apr 15, 2009 Posts: 15 Location: UAE Dubai
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Posted: Thu Dec 31, 2009 8:33 am Post subject: 2 versions CV |
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Dear UKviking,
My original CV sound exactly as you described.
Any way I hope I will land a position in IT service management.
Thanks for your comments.
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UKVIKING Senior Itiler

Joined: Sep 16, 2006 Posts: 3591 Location: London, UK
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Posted: Thu Dec 31, 2009 4:47 pm Post subject: |
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walid
If your CV is written like the inroduction
no it is not
I have specifics using small and strong words _________________ John Hardesty
ITSM Manager's Certificate (Red Badge)
Change Management is POWER & CONTROL. /....evil laughter |
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Walid Newbie


Joined: Apr 15, 2009 Posts: 15 Location: UAE Dubai
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Posted: Thu Dec 31, 2009 7:56 pm Post subject: Change configuration release manager cv |
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You didn't see my original CV the one I wrote not that you read and has been written by bayt cvservice.
Give me your email I'll send it accross if u don't beleive me.
I still don't understand what you are trying to prove by your replies to my topic, you dislike the language used to compose my cv that is your opinion.
I am seeking a job vacancy as Itil process manager, but how are you helping ...
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UKVIKING Senior Itiler

Joined: Sep 16, 2006 Posts: 3591 Location: London, UK
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Posted: Thu Dec 31, 2009 10:21 pm Post subject: |
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Walid
I am an ITIL process manager. I have been doing that for 6+ years
I know exactly what a company is looking for in a process manager role.
It is different for a manager role than a mid level technican role
I am TRYING - like the others to help you re-write your CV so that it will NOT be tossed in the trash as it does not SOUND right to the individuals that are reading it. - because that is what I have done in the past and currently as well . I am a contractor / consultant. I provide my potential customer / employer with my CV with the key points about my past roles
I dont use language like 'litany of certifications' or 'impressive track record' or 'possessing proficiency'
For one. it is the worst grammatically structured sentence that I have seen.
Since you asked for it, you get the last of both barrels
If I was in HR and I read your intro letter that accompanies your CV. I would laugh, show it to my co workers and bin your CV.
let me deconstruct what your intro says to a ITIL Process manager like me so you can see what is wrong
From a grammer point of view... what is the noun and the verb for these sentence. i see a group of phrases but no noun and verb that can be discerned easily
First the noun An IT professional
then the phrases
#1 with a litany of certifications
#2 an impressive track record of efficiently delivering projects,
#3 possessing proficiency in implementing change configuration release
management control model,
#4process re-engineering and delivering sophisticated technology solutions,
VERB ?
seeking a #5 techno-managerial position
#6 in a dynamic organization
#7 to apply accrued expertise
#8 in charting a mutually beneficial growth path
This paragraph sized sentence is fine for people like F Scott.. but if you want to get a job. Write simple sentences
Now for the interpretive dance - comments
#1 - you have a lot of certificates in IT (and maybe not in IT0which may or may not be useful for the role you are applying for . This sentence is not needed. Your CV should have an education section that lists your formal education and lists what certificates that you have
#2 - You have implemented projects within a planned deployment schedule. So you can handle time management
#3. First thought is HUH? Second thought is HUH? Then I see that you have worked in an environment where Change (comma), Configuration (comma) and Release management processes are used together. I LIKE THE CONCEPT but the grammar could be better. It says that you understand the ITIL concepts and have used them. at least 3 of them
#4 - HUH ? are you a technician or a manager type ? Do you rebuild the network or server or do you manage the team that does it ? And what is this phrase trying to say ? To me, it says... basically...
I WORK IN IT
#5 techno manager position ? are you going to be a DJ in Ibiza ? What does this mean Seriously ? I think you want to be an IT Manager. If so say it
#6 What about non dynamic organizations ? what about stable or boring organization ? How is it dynamic ....
seeks an IT management role
#7 I would hope you gain experience (accrue) and I hope you are capable of learning from your experience. This is also specious. Unless you are a complete brain dead person, you will learn and use that knowledge when you do things
#8 Are you trying to say I want to be paid for my work and hopefully the company will also increase profits by my action
So that is my synopsis / critique of your introduction paragraph.
I will tonight write what I think you should written
Please note: I am trying to help you . It may not seem that way... but I am _________________ John Hardesty
ITSM Manager's Certificate (Red Badge)
Change Management is POWER & CONTROL. /....evil laughter |
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UKVIKING Senior Itiler

Joined: Sep 16, 2006 Posts: 3591 Location: London, UK
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Posted: Fri Jan 01, 2010 12:14 am Post subject: |
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And now for what I say you should have written for the intro
Dear sir
I am an IT professional that specialises in the Service Management (ITIL) processes - Change, Configuration and Release (CCR) Management.
As part of my role managing the CCR processes, I ensure that the documented policy, process and producedures are followed in an effective and efficient manner.
In addition, I also work with the project managers to ensure that their projects are planned effectively and efficientlu in accordance with established guidelines, standards and best practices such as PRINCE2 and PMP.
I wish to offer my enclosed CV for the role of Change manager that your company is seeking to fill
Please contact me ... blah blah
And as for your CV... it should match what the company is looking for
shock huh? you should always have a master CV with every little accomplishment that you do and you should filter it based on the requirement / job specific that you are applying for
I recommend you look at this and compare it your blurb
Also, as I am the GoG for this forum I wish you a happy new year and I hope and wish you luck in finding a position worthy of your skills and knowledge _________________ John Hardesty
ITSM Manager's Certificate (Red Badge)
Change Management is POWER & CONTROL. /....evil laughter |
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mnsmith Senior Itiler

Joined: Mar 31, 2008 Posts: 109 Location: North West England
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Posted: Fri Jan 01, 2010 12:22 am Post subject: |
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I will tonight write what I think you should written
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John - I know you are dedicated to this forum but you should really let your hair down tonight, like the rest of us.
Happy New Year
Mick _________________ Mick Smith
Change, Configuration and Release Manager |
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